Editing Project
10 Copyediting errors
http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/your-guide-to-this-years-nashville-fashion-week/
1. Original: The fun starts with a week-long celebration of NFW called Shop Nashville where more than 40 boutiques and stores will be hosting special events, trunk shows and deals.
Correction: weeklong
2. Original: The Shop Nashville events will start at 10:00 a.m. and run until 6:00 p.m. everyday.
Correction: 10 a.m. and 6 p.m.
http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/03/2018-oscars-best-dressed-list/
3. Original: More often than not, the risk takers on the red carpet are the ladies.
Correction: risk-takers
http://mtsusidelines.com/2018/04/the-sound-of-silence-a-quiet-place-review/
4. Original: In the film Lee Abbott, acted and directed by John Krasinski, and his family must survive against a mysterious monster who tracks prey through sound.
Correction: In the film, Lee Abbott,
5. Original: In a movie made up of silence, I thought being deaf might be an advantage but it certainly led to disturbing scenes.
Correction: advantage, but
6. Original: However, the movie also takes the time to show that, even with disabilities, everyone has the chance to go beyond what is expected of them.
Correction: that even with disabilities,
7. Original: The term “cultural appropriator” and it’s less tasteful adjacent “culture vulture” have been thrown around quite a bit in recent times to describe a number of artists in contemporary music.
Correction: its
http://mtsusidelines.com/2017/01/review-migos-rise-to-the-occasion-on-culture/
8. Original: “Culture” consists of 13 tracks with features from DJ Khaled, Uzi Vert, Gucci Mane, 2 Chainz and Travis Scott.
Correction: Lil Uzi Vert is not featured in the album
9. Original: Expectations were set at an all-time high when rapper and award-winning actor Childish Gambino gave the Migos shoutout at the Golden Globes earlier this month.
Correction: gave the Migos a shoutout
10. Original: With their unique production and abstract ab-libs, the group has changed the way in which Hip-Hop is traditionally viewed.
Correction: hip-hop
Copy edit for Sidelines
I went into the CIM on Tuesday, April 10 at 1 p.m., but unfortunately none of the Sidelines editors were there. I was able to get in contact with lifestyles editor Tayhlor Stephenson who contacted Brinley Hineman to send me an article to edit.
I edited a Netflix listicle written by Delaney Dickey, which included some minor errors in it. Most errors dealt with some redundancy, punctuation and AP style. I found it a little difficult to edit the listicle because it was a first-person opinion piece, so I tried to fix issues without changing the tone too much. I enjoyed editing the piece because it was different from what I would normally have to edit and also gave me good suggestions on what my next Netflix binge-watch series will be.
Social Media Story Idea
I think this could be potential story for Sidelines because there are students who have family or friends with autism and it’s a great way to let others be aware of autism while enjoying activities with others in the community. It is also Patterson Park Community Center’s 1st Annual Autism Family Fun Festival.
https://twitter.com/Murfboro/status/983811605241581568
It would be interesting to follow around a volunteer for the Special Olympics held on MTSU campus to see their experience and the joy that these volunteers can bring to the community.
Photo Assignment
Art students’ work displayed in the hallways of the Todd Art Gallery on Thursday, March 29, 2018.
A blossoming tree while walking past the McWherter Learning Resource Center on Tuesday, April 3, 2018.
Laura O’Neill, a sophomore majoring in horse science, searches for ideas on her phone for her art project on Tuesday, April 3, 2018.
Bikes propped outside of the Keathley University Center while students grab lunch on Tuesday, April 3, 2018.
Seal in the middle of the courtyard between BAS, BRAGG and James E. Walker Library on Monday, April 2, 2018.
Associate Professor of Journalism Leon Alligood in his office on Thursday, March 29, 2018.
Reference desk in the James E. Walker Library on Thursday, March 29, 2018.
A meat lovers pizza from the Pizza Hut at the Keathley University Center on Thursday, March 29, 2018.
Students producing content in the CIM on Thursday, March 29, 2018.
The south side of the Business & Aerospace Building on Friday, March 30, 2018.
News Story Correction
“An article on Tuesday about the appointment of the British designer Kim Jones as the new artistic director of Dior Homme misstated overall revenue last year at Christian Dior Couture. It was 2.23 billion euros, or $2.7 billion, not €43.7 billion.”
It was important to make this correction because 2.23 billion euros is a huge difference from 43.7 billion euros. If the mistake wasn’t corrected, it would’ve made it seem like they were making billions more dollars than they actually were, therefore causing questioning within the company about their actual revenue.
EC: Ethical Violation of a Journalist
This article talks about how Brian Ross, investigative journalist and chief investigative correspondent for ABC News, incorrectly reported information about President Trump during the election. Ross reported that Trump directed Michael T. Flynn, the former national security adviser, to make contact with Russian officials while Trump was still a candidate in the 2016 presidential campaign.
It was confirmed later that Trump appointed Flynn to make contact with Russia after the election, when Trump was the president-elect. ABC News apologized and suspended Ross for four weeks without pay.
Vanity Fair: “Why Writers Lie”
In short, I learned: don’t plagiarize or fabricate information no matter the circumstance. I find it interesting how most of these journalists with years of experience know that it’s not ethical, but choose to do it anyway in hopes of getting fame off of unusual or extreme stories, when in reality they gain a different kind of fame from falsifying information or plagiarizing. It seems that these journalist don’t realize what they’re putting on the line — their reputation, their credibility and their whole career — until they get caught, then they apologize.
One quote from Janet Cooke, who fabricated a story about an eight-year-old heroin addict, was pretty extreme, but it shows how much one mistake can cost your career. “Essentially, I’ve spent the last thirty years waiting to die.” Reading Cooke’s experience along with other journalists, one would think that journalists today would learn from others’ mistakes, but it seems like everyone wants to go through their own experience spiraling down the drain.
Obituary Edit
Basketball legend Kobe Bryant, died Feb 15. (take out period) due to a sudden heart attack at (in) his home in Los Angeles. He was 39. (could add after the name i.e. Kobe Bryant, 39,)
Bryant made his prodigal arrival to the National Basketball Association in 1996 as a 17-year-old kid out of Lower Merion High School in Philadelphia. His meteoric rise amongst the world’s elite would eventually thrust him into legendary status, (no comma needed because not complete thought on the other side) and universal recognition as one of the greatest players the game has ever seen.
As a five–time NBA champion, 18–time NBA all-star and 11–time all-NBA first team selectee, Bryant would carve a basketball legacy matched by only a select few in history. (hyphenate five-time, 18-time and 11-time) He also won the NBA most valuable player award in 2008. (could shorten to “2008 NBA MVP award) His jersey numbers, (missing comma) 8 and 24, are both retired by the Los Angeles Lakers, where he spent the entirety of his 20-year career.
Few possessed the work ethic that Kobe Bryant did. The combination of his passion, divine talent and assassin–like (hyphen) approach towards the game served as the basis for what would be known as the “mamba mentality”, (comma inside quote) and the foundation for his nickname: The Black Mamba. (quotes, not italics)
Mamba’s 81-point explosion on Jan. 22, 2006, stands as the second–highest (no hyphen needed) scoring total in a game in NBA history. His 60-point performance in his final game captivated the sports world and would be the perfect, bitter–sweet (bittersweet) farewell to the future first ballot hall of famer. (First-Ballot Hall of Famer) There will never be another.
Bryant was the official ambassador for After-School All-Stars, a national children’s charity that provides after-school programs to 72,000 inner-city kids. Along with his wife, Vanessa, Bryant established the Kobe and Vanessa Bryant Family Foundation in 2007. The foundation is dedicated to improving the lives of youth and families in need, both domestically and globally, and encouraging young people to stay active through sports.
“Today I feel so sad, but I’m also grateful to have known such a kind and generous soul. R.I.P,” says longtime friend Stacy Williams.
Along with his wife Vanessa, (no need to say her name again) Bryant is survived by his parents, Joe and Pamela Bryant; sisters, Sharia Washington and Shaya Bryant-Tabb; and young daughters, Natalia, Gianna and Bianka.
Mamba out, but forever in our hearts and memories.
Overall, the obituary had a subjective tone to it, which should be avoided. There weren’t any issues that I could find with the facts. Corrections with explanations are in red.
Bruno Mars Obituary
This is a fictional story written for a college journalism course.
American singer-songwriter Peter Gene Hernandez, better known as Bruno Mars, died of a heart attack on Feb. 15 in his home in Los Angeles at the age of 32.
Born in Honolulu, Hawaii, Mars was raised in a musical family with his father being a percussionist and his mother being a singer and dancer. He was widely influenced by legendary music icons such as Elvis Presley and Michael Jackson, as his career started from being a 3-year-old impersonating Elvis.
Mars moved to Los Angeles to pursue his musical career. Since being featured on the songs “Nothin’ on You” by B.o.B and “Billionaire” by Travie McCoy, Mars went on to pursue his solo career, releasing his debut album “Doo-Wops & Hooligans,” and his second album, “Unorthodox Jukebox.”
Mars’ third studio album “24K Magic” won seven Grammy Awards in 2016, and he went on to win all six Grammys he was nominated for in the 2018 Grammy Awards.
Along with being a singer-songwriter, Mars was also a record producer for a number of albums, a multi-instrumentalist and a choreographer. He is always seen on stage with his bandmates, “The Hooligans,” performing alongside him.
Mars has sold over 130 million records worldwide and has performed in two Super Bowl halftime shows. He carries on the legacy of bringing back old funk, soul, R&B and pop.
“Today I feel so sad, but I’m also grateful to have known such a kind and generous soul. R.I.P.” tweeted longtime friend Stacy Williams.
Mars is survived by his father Peter Hernandez and his five siblings: Eric, Presley, Jaime, Tiara and Tahiti Hernandez. Mars also leaves behind his girlfriend of 7 years, Jessica Caban.
Good Lead
Three jail officials were charged Monday in the case of a Milwaukee inmate who died of dehydration in his cell after being denied water for seven days.
I thought this article contained a good lead because it’s short and to the point while still providing answers to the questions: Who? What? When? Where? Why? How?
Ikumi Kajisa 